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Broken System

on March 3, 2014
Chapter: Meet the Parents
Characters: Fawn, Mike, Sylvia
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Discussion (10) ¬

  1. smash
    smash
    March 3, 2014, 21:16 | # | Reply

    in what order are the speech bubbles read?

    • Pete
      Pete
      March 4, 2014, 07:26 | # | Reply

      Left column, top to bottom, then right right column, top to bottom.

      • Andy4Hire
        Andy4Hire
        March 4, 2014, 11:30 | # | Reply

        Yeah, Pete, smash’s question is understandable, but I think you handled the layout of that panel about as well as you could possibly have done, given what you were trying to accomplish. The speech balloons are close enough together vertically and far enough apart horizontally that the eye follows them more easily down than across, which is what you intended.

        What with all the titles and protocols and so on, this is a particularly fun strip to read right after watching the recent episodes of Downton Abbey. There appears to be a typo in the second panel, however, though I certainly agree with Mike’s assessment that “Sir” is way too formal for him.

        • Marscaleb
          Marscaleb
          December 8, 2014, 18:20 | # | Reply

          I read it just fine.
          This read pattern has been WELL established with nearly 800 pages following that exact order.

  2. MysticJanus
    MysticJanus
    March 4, 2014, 11:37 | # | Reply

    Caught a word order mix-up in Mike’s first speech bubble in the last panel. You have “I what ask” instead of “what I ask”.

    • Ninkybug
      Ninkybug
      March 9, 2014, 14:44 | # | Reply

      It’s not a mix-up, it was a mistake, hey Pete! Can you please fix that? (You’ll probably get a lot of comments about it)

  3. Ninkybug
    Ninkybug
    March 4, 2014, 11:59 | # | Reply

    Mike’s not manly enough to be called “sir” can you call him something like ” ” that’s right, don’t call him anything. Just kidding but really, call him something like “cookie lover”. I’m serious. Or you can call him “mike”, his name.

  4. zingowner
    zingowner
    March 4, 2014, 12:53 | # | Reply

    Typo in second speech bubble of last panel. “do I what ask”

  5. peder
    peder
    March 4, 2014, 20:02 | # | Reply

    if mike is not careful, cyrstal might have to fire sylvia…

  6. Nam
    Nam
    March 7, 2014, 05:29 | # | Reply

    In the second panel, “to formal” should be “too formal”

    I’m really enjoying this storyline. 🙂

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